Okay, first of all, this is a
very good app for only a week of Photoshop exerience, and I for one am impressed. Really the only problems are all specific to typesetting, and most everyone makes these mistakes and they're all easily fixable ^^
That said... this will be long... sorry... -w-;
Everything:
Capitalize. Whether you hit the caps key or toggle
http://img.skitch.com/20100910-8y95p9yn6b7hx9d8drdnbqis6j.png (accessed through Windows > Character in PS CS4), EVERYTHING must be in caps. If you're not sure if you're in allcaps or not, check how the I looks in Wild Words; when in caps it looks like "I", when in lowercase it looks like "l."
BB7P1 - Nudge "Wait, Kouta" and "Don't accept his challenge" down a little.
P3 - Nudge "Baby Be'el" down a little. Add punctuation (of your choice) to "weak."
P4 - Add punctuation to the end of "Let's explain," "Ahh, gotcha," the end of the "except when he's having a fit" line and the "his strength becomes" line.
BB8P3 - Nudge "A punk from town" line down a little and "Geeze" both down somewhat and a smidgen to the right.
P4 - Nudge "Trash" and the "I'll start by" lines down. Nudge the "I'll start by" line to the right a bit. Both lines could also use to be a bit bigger, IMO, because there's lots of white space.
P5 - Nudge all of the lines down. Especially "Wai-."
P6 - Nudge down "Please wait" a tiny bit.
DD1Story/Art - Don't put a space between them. I don't know if using CCZoinks here is okay or not; most use Wild Words but.
"The first chapter can..." - Center the text.
"Release of the..." - Center the text.
DD3P1 - Add punctuation to the end of the "Welcome, how fortunate" line.
P2 - Nudge "I'm a Devil" down a tiny bit.
P3 - "But she called me a..." line is too close to the edges of the bubble, rearrange the text or make it smaller to make it fit ^^
P4 - "Geez... stop causing trouble..." line is also too close to the edges of the bubble.
FT3P2 - Nudge both lines down. Nudge "That's the Miko of the Sky" over to the right a little.
P3 - Nudge "the Miko" line down a little.
P6 - Nudge "Now this is quite..." line down a little.
P7 - Nudge "Come with me" line down a little and over to the right.
FT5P2 - Nudge "huh" down a little.
P4 - Nudge line down a tiny bit.
P6 - Nudge "I have no more business" line to the right somewhat.
FT9P5 - Nudge "It was a close thing" down.
P6 - Nudge "That wound" down a little bit.
HBP1 - Move the "slides the door close" SFX further away from the panel borders, it's too close to the line :)
P2 - I could be wrong, but the thoughts in this panel look darker than #545454. If it's actually saving as #e3e3e3 or something, make sure you're saving as RGB.
P3 - I know you hate to cover up your beautiful clone job (which it is), but the "my face was naturally" line to the right so that the other two lines aren't so close to the border. Try aligning the tops of the "my face was naturally" and "thanks to that air of" lines.
RebornTsuna (beneath "with their companions" line) - Finish getting rid of most of the white space left behind by the Japanese text, on his suit.
Gokudera (in the middle) - Clone out the white line.
Okay! As you can see, your biggest problem is centering. One thing to keep in mind while positioning text is that it's always better to nudge text
lower than higher since the human eye reads the below-center text as perfect center. Just nudge, nudge, nudge at a particular line until it looks like it's in the middle of the bubble. Keep in mind weird bubble shapes and the like >_<;;
I mentioned this previously, but it begs reiterating, please do remember to use capital letters for
everything. The only exception is Augie, and you can choose use allcaps for it if you prefer.
Please also remember that every line must end with punctuation of some sort. If the script didn't have any, choose whatever seems appropriate.
And finally, and this is important, but please try and arrange text in more of a "diamond" shape. I didn't critique anything specifically, but if at all possible you should always strive to have your text make a nice diamond-ish shape. Some lines can be fixed to look better very easily--such as panel 4, BB1; just rearrange the first two words to be "His / strength" instead of "His strength." Examples of lines that turned out really well would be, like, "He doesn't seem like a bad guy, but..." from BB7 and "There's no doubt about it..." from FT3.
