HOLD OFF TEAM MEMBERS THIS INDONESIAN GUY IS ALL MINE! I'LL CRITIQUE EVEN IF IT COST ME MY LIFE! That said, I'll be critiquing this. Be patient though, need to do some errands first XD

Are you ready? :p

Baku 2:
/1
Bubble 1: Too small and it should be centered. Nudge right 2 px and then nudge down like a lot.
Bubble 2: The text arrangements could be better. Diamond shapes are preferable than any other weird shapes. Nudge right a little and then nudge down a little as well.
Bubble 3: There's no mistake here, since hyphening should always be avoided. But, making the text smaller could work another acceptable shape than this one. Right now you're sandwich-ing the text. Make the text smaller and try again.
Bubble 4: Again, text arrangements. It could be "Why/do we feel" instead sandwich-ing like you're doing now. Nudge right and then nudge down.
Bubble 5: Nudge left for like 3 px and then nudge down.

/2
Bubble 1: Well, no mistakes. But text arrangements could be a lot better. Nudge left like a lot, and hen nudge down.
Bubble 2: Nice! The only mistake is the font. Use Midnight Kernboy for bubbles such as these ones.
Bubble 3: Tsk, tsk wrong font. Bubbly fonts like these should stay Wildwords. Don't use Mouthbreather, it doesn't fit XD
Bubble 4: Wrong font again, see Bubble 2's mistake. Nudge right and then down.

/3
Thoughts: Lol what font are these? Use Wildwords italic #545454 for thoughts like these. And the speedlines behind "I'm motivated" Redraw them, don't make it so obvious.

/4
Bubble 1: Make it smaller.

/5
Spiky bubbles are supposed to be CCZoinks XD

Baku 9:
/1
Box: Make the Felt in Caps. Actually, ALL fonts should be in caps. (Before you can say that Wildword's already in Caps. Look at the letter i. It looks like "l" and not "I", well, "I" is the right one.)
Bubble 1: Nudge left.
Bubble 2: Nudge right.
Bubble 3: Nudge right 2 px.
Bubble 4: Make it "Looking at/him calms me"

/2
Bubble 1: Make it bigger, and nudge right and down.

/3
Bubble 1: Wrong font. Spiky bubbles = CCZoinks. Hammer the font guidelines and don't use any other font for tests.
Bubble 2: This should be Wildwords.
Bubble 3: CCZoinks.
Bubble 4: Wildwords. Nudge right and then down.
Bubble 5: Nudge down.

Baku 14:
/2
Phone: Use Midnight Kernboy for every text in this panel.

/3
Bubble 1: CCZoinks
Bubble 2: CCZoinks
Bubble 3: CCZoinks and nudge up.

/4
Bubble 1: Nudge left 2 px and then down.

/5
Bubble 1: CCZoinks and make it "I'm/going to/call Akito-san!" If this doesn't work, well, don't sandwich the text.
Bubble 2: CCZoinks and then nudge down.

/6
Bubble 1: Make it bigger and then nudge left, and then nudge down.

/8
Wildwords italic #545454

DD 4:
Use CCZoinks for blurb texts like these. The cloning behind "Today in the demon world," is too obvious. You can use healing brush to make it less obvious.

DD 14:
/1
Bubble 1: Make it smaller (small enough to not touch the edges), and then nudge down.

/3
Bubble 1: CCZoinks. Actually, you can make it "What the,/ Bastard!!" By making the font size smaller.
Bubble 2: CCZoinks and nudge left 1 px.

/4
Bubble 2: You can make it "Who,/you ask?" Instead of separating everything. Nudge down.

/5
Bubble 1: Nudge left. You can make this smaller and rearrange the text to be diamond shape.
Bubble 2: Make it bigger and nudge down.

FT 6:
/1
Bubble 1: Nudge down.
Bubble 3: CCZoinks. Nudge left and then down.

/3
SFX notes should be in Felt

/4
Bubble 1: Nudge left and then down.
Bubble 2: Nudge left.
Bubble 3: CCZoinks. Make it bigger and then nudge down.
Bubble 4: Don't sandwich "Bad" rearrange it so "Bad" will not have its own line.

/6
Bubble 1: CCZoinks

/7
Bubble 1: Nudge down.
Bubble 2: Wildwords.
Bubble 3: CCZoinks.

Rainbow 16:
/1
Bubble 1: Use Mouthbreather here. And nudge up slightly.

/3
Bubble 1: Make it smaller and rearrange. Don't separate the ellipses.
Bubble 2: Make it smaller and rearrange.

Reborn 13:
/1
Gokudera's "Tenth" it should be in augie
Bubble 3 & 4: CCZoinks. For b3: Nudge right. For b4: Nudge right and down.

/2
Bubble 1: You can make it smaller and rearrange to diamond shape.
Bubble 2: Same as Bubble 1.
Bubble 3: CCZoinks.
Bubble 4: Make it Bigger and CCZoinks.

/3
Both bubbles bigger and CCZoinks

/4
These are thoughts. So, Wildwords italic #545454. Make it bigger too XD

/5
Wildwords italic #545454. Make it bigger. Also, in case you don't know, "//" in script means separate. So, these two sentences needs to be separated. "It's true that you and Kozato Enma are alike in many ways..." Should go to the white space beside Tsuna's face.

/6
Bigger and Wildwords italic #545454

Reborn 15:
Gokudera clone: D+
Ryohei clone: D+
Quite poor grades coming from me. I gonna enclose picture to make it easier.

+C:
/1
SFX notes = Felt
Bubble 3: Nudge left 2 px and then down.

/2
Black Bubble: Wildwords italic
Bubble 1: "Ah." Should end with punctuations.
Bubble 2: CCZoinks.

/3
All bubbles here: CCZoinks

/4
Bubble 1: Make it slightly bigger and then nudge left.
Bubble 2: Nudge down a little.

OKAY! Overall, not bad. But needs extra work. CAPITALIZE EVERYTHING! Remember the guidelines and don't use any other fonts than what was mentioned. Redrawing is always hard, even senior team members find it hard. No worries. Remember to erase ALL Japanese letters and redraw it to make sure that no one knows that you redrew.

I'm not normally this nitpicky XD it's just that you're an Indonesian, you get all your priveleges from me  I want to make sure you pass and will be very competent during your stay in IEM. 

Good luck on your next redo!

Love,
~Chiriko





 

 
oh maan ..
can you teach me how to redraw it???
 
please teach me ..

Okay! Second crits!

Baku 2:
/1
Bubble 2: Nudge down.
Bubble 4: Again, text arrangements. It could be "Why/do we feel" instead sandwich-ing like you're doing now.
Bubble 5: Nudge right 1 px and down a little.

/2
Bubble 1: Text arrangement. Work it until it shaped like diamond :p
Bubble 2: Good~ But, it should be in all caps.
Bubble 4: Good, just need to capitalize.

/3
Thoughts: Tsk, tsk. Use wildwords italic with color #545454 here :p

/5
Good! But, again, capitalize everything XD

Baku 9:
/1
Box: Capitalize all of this.

/3
Bubble 1: Capitalize this ;)
Bubble 3: Capitalize~
Bubble 4: Nudge left a little.
Bubble 5: Nudge left 2 px.

Baku 14:
/2
Phone: Capitalize the Midnight Kernboy XD

/3
Bubble 1: Capitalize.
Bubble 2: Capitalize.
Bubble 3: Capitalize.

/4
Bubble 1: Nudge left a little and then down a little.

/5
Bubble 1: Capitalize.
Bubble 2: Capitalize. Nudge left.

/6
Bubble 1: Nudge left, and then nudge down.

/8
Wildwords italic #545454

DD 4:
Capitalize.

DD 14:
/1
Bubble 1: Nudge down a little.

/3
Bubble 1: Capitalize.
Bubble 2: Capitalize.

/4
Bubble 1: Nudge left.

FT 6:
/1
Bubble 3: Capitalize.

/3
Capitalize the SFX notes.

/4
Bubble 3: Capitalize.

/6
Bubble 1: Capitalize.

/7

Bubble 3: Capitalize.

Rainbow 16:
Good!

Reborn 13:
This page's mistake lays on the fonts only. CCZoinks, ALL CAPITALIZED. And Wildwords italic #545454. In case you don't get it, #545454 will looked like it's gray-colored instead of black XD

Reborn 15:
Gokudera clone: C+
Ryohei clone: C-
HOLY HELL GOD YOU IMPROVED A LOT!!! O.o
Gotta enclose the picture to improve it. You got to have B- or above to pass XDD (Indonesian privelege lol)


+C:
Same as Reborn 13 with plus notes. ALL FONTS SHOULD BE CAPITALIZED!

HOLY GOD YOU IMPROVED BY A LOT!!! Let me tell you an awesome hint on how to CAPITALIZE everything. You see under where you manage fonts, there's a button like "TT" <- that. Click that and everything would be capitalized :D

Wishing you best of luck on your next redo!

Love,
~Chiriko

Sorry for the late response (though, really, your app will be one of the fast processed app after our regression. Others took weeks XD) Sho-chan and I had to do Reborn yesterday.

Let me tell you something, my centering crits is the one of the team's most loose centering, and I got QC'd for centering too low, or too high often. Because I can't say anything more about your centering, someone better than me in centering will take over your app. Meanwhile, I'm going to crit things other than centering :3

Baku 2:

Reborn 15:

The rest will be up to Sho-chan to decide :p

Btw, if you dunno, Sho-chan is Geno Jester. Look him up, he lurks often ;D

oh maaaaaan .
is it so hard to join the group?

Quote from: kuekuatsheu on August 27, 2011, 05:09:50 AM

oh maaaaaan .
is it so hard to join the group?

lol funny you should say that XD The answer is yes, it's hard. IEM is one of HQ groups that does speed. I've seen many other applicants giving up after their second or third redo XD I dunno if you'll join them, but you're still in normal countings. 4 redo isn't that bad. It took me 7, and some, 6 redos. But after you joined the team... *looks at the Behind the Scenes thread* It'll all worth it. ;D

i quit man .
it's hard .
T.T