Topic: Proofreader Application (Read 768 times)

reborntkh · « **on:** September 22, 2011, 03:25:16 AM »

Name/Nickname: Reborntkh

Country Of Origin & Time Zone:country of Origin-America Time zone-Pacific Time Zone

Gender: Male

Age: 13

Enter Msn or Yahoo messenger: I have none. I have a gmail though.

What Field You Would Like To Be Positioned In: Proofreader

Why You Want This Position: I want this position because I would like to help out your site and I would also like to see how a manga page is made. I'd also try to speed things up a little in editing.

Your Time Available: On Mondays and Fridays I'll be available from 2:30-4:30. On Tuesdays and Thursdays I'll be available from 3:30-5:30. On Wednesday I'll be available from 1:30-4:30. On Saturday and Sunday I'll be available all day.

Experience: This is the first time I've tried out for something manga related. If you are questioning if I'm good at Proofreading then the answer is yes. I have had straight A's since Elementary School.

Preliminary Test:
p.118
Niko: There's no cage in Polaris!

text: In fact, the story of Polaris is about how "the prince and the princess of Ursa Minor accepted the arranged marriage and lived happily ever after." And that's all.

text: Yes. What intervened in this story was my "imagination."
Fran: ...The conclusion ought to be the same.
Sfx: Rustle.

text: However, it's you too who is being deceptive as well. You're talking about your "imagination" since you too have your favorable storyline of "She chose on her own to stay by her love."

p.119
Niko: You're a liar!
text: Aah, why this child look straight at me with those kind of eyes?

Niko: You deceived me! / You're awful!
text: As if I'm wrong.
Sfx: Breathe in.

Fran: Yes

Fran: Maybe it's a lie. // I thought it would be nice if it was like that.

p.120
text: However, I didn't deveive you. That is to say, those were stories told for the purpose of entertaining people...
text: The truth of fiction is almost helpless before "imagination." As for this world, everything is about fact based on evidence.
Fran: It doesn't matter whether it's true or false. Since its you who decides if my story was true. / You should just accept that if it was interesting.
text: Well, without evidence, even history and fact could become fiction. / I'm only saying that it's more fun if there's room for intervention.

p.121
Fran: That's also why listeners decide on what truth their own hearts want
text: "Cage of Polaris." / This cage is made up of thought called "me." This would also be the truth for people who are happy being locked in a cage.
Fran: You too.

p.122
Fran: Don't you think that freedom of speech and pleasantness lies in there?
Niko: ...

Niko: Niko doesn't understand those difficult things, though... / I understand one thing!
Fran: What is it?

Niko: That you're a pervert!
Sfx: Smile.
Fran: Yes, that's correct. I'm glad that you got that right.

p.123
Fran: --Aah, it's around time for me to go, otherwise it will be dark soon.
Niko: ...

Iceiphoenix · « **Reply #1 on:** September 28, 2011, 08:40:29 AM »

Hi there! Thanks for your patience! :)

I'll be going through your test today.

Here we go:

p.118
Niko: There's no cage in Polaris!
- Try to incorporate "exists" from the original translation.

text: However, it's you too who is being deceptive as well. You're talking about your "imagination" since you too have your favorable storyline of "She chose on her own to stay by her love."
- Get rid of the first "too", since you already have "as well" on the end of the sentence.

p.119
text: Aah, why this child look straight at me with those kind of eyes?
- Missing word after "why".

Fran: Yes
- Punctuate.

p.120
text: However, I didn't deveive you. That is to say, those were stories told for the purpose of entertaining people...
- Spelling of "devieve" should be "deceive".

Fran: It doesn't matter whether it's true or false. Since its you who decides if my story was true. / You should just accept that if it was interesting.
- In the second sentence, "its" should be "it's".
- You can change the second period into a comma.

p.121
Fran: That's also why listeners decide on what truth their own hearts want
- Punctuate.

p.122
Fran: Don't you think that freedom of speech and pleasantness lies in there?
- "Lies" should be "lie", since there are 2 subjects.

Niko: That you're a pervert!
- Don't get rid of the extra exclamation marks. (Max. of 3 though.)

p.123
Fran: --Aah, it's around time for me to go, otherwise it will be dark soon.
- Change "around" to "about".

~*~*~*~

After going through your test, I can see many simple mistakes that can be fixed if you reread it... You're pretty good for a 13 year old! :o I was quite surprised with your test! XD

Anyway, here's the second test. :)

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Good luck!

reborntkh · « **Reply #2 on:** September 28, 2011, 10:22:13 PM »

OMG I'm soooooooooooo sorry. I always think that I'm right the first time and never choose to reread. I'll try to refrain from not reading on this test. Again, I am VERY sorry and I hope you'll accept me as a proofreader.

Quote from: Iceiphoenix on September 28, 2011, 08:40:29 AM

Hi there! Thanks for your patience! :)

I'll be going through your test today.

Here we go:

p.118
Niko: There's no cage in Polaris!
- Try to incorporate "exists" from the original translation.

text: However, it's you too who is being deceptive as well. You're talking about your "imagination" since you too have your favorable storyline of "She chose on her own to stay by her love."
- Get rid of the first "too", since you already have "as well" on the end of the sentence.

p.119
text: Aah, why this child look straight at me with those kind of eyes?
- Missing word after "why".

Fran: Yes
- Punctuate.

p.120
text: However, I didn't deveive you. That is to say, those were stories told for the purpose of entertaining people...
- Spelling of "devieve" should be "deceive".

Fran: It doesn't matter whether it's true or false. Since its you who decides if my story was true. / You should just accept that if it was interesting.
- In the second sentence, "its" should be "it's".
- You can change the second period into a comma.

p.121
Fran: That's also why listeners decide on what truth their own hearts want
- Punctuate.

p.122
Fran: Don't you think that freedom of speech and pleasantness lies in there?
- "Lies" should be "lie", since there are 2 subjects.

Niko: That you're a pervert!
- Don't get rid of the extra exclamation marks. (Max. of 3 though.)

p.123
Fran: --Aah, it's around time for me to go, otherwise it will be dark soon.
- Change "around" to "about".

~*~*~*~

After going through your test, I can see many simple mistakes that can be fixed if you reread it... You're pretty good for a 13 year old! :o I was quite surprised with your test! XD

Anyway, here's the second test. :)

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p.1-2
Someone: Vergiss. / Mein nicht.
(((These 2 lines are writing in Alphabet. So no change please.)))
Foot: act. 6 “Forget me not”
Volume 1 on sale on 22nd October

p.3-4
Text: Remember it. Burn it into your memory. // Be engraved in your memory. Curse and pain. // Carry it on your back. // (--Together.)

Someone: Dying is no allowed. // Living is not allowed.

Someone: Your will is not needed. Do as I say like puppet. Breathing is your duty. // That’s all your allowed to do.

Someone: I wouldn’t allow you to have any other freedom

p.5-6
Someone: It’s painful isn’t it?

Someone: That way / must be better!!

Fran: Dont listen to it!!
Sfx: Clank.

Sfx: Float.

p.7-8
Fran: Go!! // You mustn’t stay here!

Fran: Run!!

Text: Don’t accept words. // Eyes… // --Close your eyes.

p.9-10
Alba: An illustraited plant reference book?
Robin: Its about gardening. / Unless I do somthing about our terrace before spring come, he’ll surely make fun of me again.

Robin: I cannot loose to a person like Ziggy-san.
Text: Competing over something silly
Alba: What’re you talking about?

Robin: Like I said, it’s over gardening that we’re competing. Despite of his appearance, he’s a very family-oriented person.
Text: And so he make suspicious medicin!!
Alba: That’s not convincing at all!! { small: Such as gardening?!! }

Robin: Alba-san, you too should have a hobby or too otherwise you’ll be sick mentaly?
Text: Because of your job…
Alba: That’s none of your business…

Thought: A hobby… Perhaps photography huh…?

Alba: …

Alba: Now that reminds me, Robin
Sfx: Tap, tap.
Robin: What is it
Alba: Can you look at this?
Text: Your back?

Sfx: Chill.

p.11-12
Text: --May be Robin, / wouldn’t put his nose into the reason / why I have these scars.

Robin: …
Text: He’s that kind of a person.
Robin: Is it… // about the scars?

Alba: No, don’t worry about the scars.
Robin: Don’t worry about it?
Alba: It’s not about scars. // Hmm…

Alba: Do you see something like a flowers?
Robin: A flower…
Niko: Robin-san!! I’ve found another flower book!!
Robin: No, I don’t see any

Niko: Gya~~. Scars. Aaaaah!!
Text: Noo / ooo.

Niko: Ouch ouch!! It looks so painfull!! What’s that!! What is that!!
Text: What kind of play is tht?!!
Thought: So noisy…

p.13-14
Niko: Oh… but… // thats the same as Niko

Niko: I feel really happy to have / even one thing the same as Alba

Text: --Happy.
Thought: That can’t be… true.

Alba: It’s my first time to hear like that after showing these scars.
Thought: It’s not a happy thing at all.
Niko: Listen?! // Having the same thing means, // a little special to girls!! / You get that?!!!

Text: Is that so…?
Alba: You look excited… / Well… may be something like that’s not bad. // Hm—n.
Niko: Ah!!

p.15-16
Niko: You smiled just now!! / Your face just now!!
Alba: ? // Eeh??

Niko: One more time!!

Alba: …

Niko: !!
Sfx: Smile <3
Text with an arrow: trying.

Niko: That’s it!! // Smile face must be the best!!

Text: “Smile face must be the best!!”

p.17-18
Text: Oh—, I see.

Text: People smile back to you… when you smile.

Text: Trivial things like this makes me happy, / and I feel like crying.

p.19-20
Niko: Ah, Robin-san, I like this flower too!!
Robin: Anyway, if you just wake up then you should least go wash your face.
Alba: Yes…

Thought: My back… Was it a dream…?
Sfx: Wipe.

Sfx: Chill.

Text: --No it wasn’t a dream.

Text: Only I can see it.

p.21-22
Alba: Robin.
Robin: Yes?

Alba: Does curse… has something to do with… forget-me-not flower?
Robin: Forget-me-not?

Robin: …

Robin: There’s a banned curse. // “Curse” is, you know, Alba-san. / It’s a kind of Goetia that formed by you guys’; “cats’” language.

Robin: The curse of Forget-me-not. // This is a curse that to synchronize lives.

Robin: When one of them dies, the other one will die. No matter they love each other or not. // However, this is the “Proof of passions for deep affection that to share the time of one’s death.”

Robin: This heavily romanticized interpretation was once very popular among “Cats”, // and it caused increase of the number of double suicide. It became a social problem and that’s why now it’s a banned curse, though...

p.23
Robin: What about it?

Text: -forget me not- / …to be continued 11/19

Good luck!

reborntkh · « **Reply #3 on:** September 28, 2011, 10:31:00 PM »

Should I do the Second Test here or on a different thread.

Iceiphoenix · « **Reply #4 on:** September 29, 2011, 04:26:09 AM »

Please do the second test here. ^^

INeededThat · « **Reply #5 on:** September 29, 2011, 06:12:11 PM »

I disagree with Pho's assessment here. Frankly, if the mistakes were simple, you should have picked them out on the first proof. We're looking for potential to help with releases; if you miss simple mistakes on the first readthrough even if you know they're mistakes, and you send it for release, it doesn't matter if you knew. They'd still be there.

I would have denied you right there and then if I was the one reviewing your application, so good thing you got the nice Phony! xD This means, however, that you'd better be really careful on this next test because if I'm the one reviewing it, I'm not going to be happy about any mistakes, no matter if they were careless or not.

Other than that, I'm worried about your capitalisations. Things like "Elementary School", "Second Test" and "Proofreading" should not be capitalised because they're not proper names, just nouns. I can't say anything about age because hey, I started when I was fourteen (although I sucked big time), but you really have to be careful about every single thing if you want to be a proofreader, so that's just a heads-up.

Good luck!

reborntkh · « **Reply #6 on:** September 30, 2011, 12:03:03 AM »

Jeez you've got me jumpy now. I'll make sure there are no mistakes.

reborntkh · « **Reply #7 on:** September 30, 2011, 12:13:38 AM »

Well here is the second test. INeededThat has got me nervous so please reply as soon as possible.

.1-2
Someone: Vergiss. / Mein nicht.
Foot: act. 6 “Forget me not”
Volume 1 on sale on 22nd October!

p.3-4
Text: Remember it. Burn it into your memory. // Let it be engraved in your memory, this curse and pain. // Carry it on your back. // (—Together.)

Someone: Dying is not allowed. // Living is not allowed.

Someone: Your will is not needed. Do as I say like a puppet. Breathing is your duty. // That’s all you're allowed to do.

Someone: I won’t allow you to have any other freedom.

p.5-6
Someone: It’s painful, isn’t it?

Someone: That way / must be better!!

Fran: Don't listen to it!!
Sfx: Clank

Sfx: Float

p.7-8
Fran: Go!! // You mustn’t stay here!

Fran: Run!!

Text: Don’t listen to *his/her/it’s* words. // Eyes... // —Close your eyes.
*I’m not sure about the gender off the speaker so I just put multiple options.*

p.9-10
Alba: An illustrated plant reference book?
Robin: It's about gardening. / Unless I do something about our terrace before spring comes, he’ll surely make fun of me again.

Robin: I cannot lose to a person like Ziggy-san.
Text: Competing over something silly.
Alba: What’re you talking about?

Robin: Like I said, we’re competing over gardening. Despite his appearance, he’s a very family-oriented person.
Text: And so he makes suspicious medicine!!
Alba: That’s not convincing at all!! {small: Such as gardening?!! }

Robin: Alba-san, you should also have a hobby or two, otherwise, you’ll be mentally ill.
Text: Because of your job...
Alba: That’s none of your business...

Thought: A hobby... Perhaps photography...?

Alba: ...

Alba: Now that reminds me, Robin.
Sfx: Tap, tap
Robin: What is it?
Alba: Can you take a look at this?
Text: Your back?

Sfx: Chill

p.11-12
Text: —Maybe Robin, / wouldn’t stick his nose into the reason / why I have these scars.

Robin: ...
Text: He’s that kind of person.
Robin: Is it... // about the scars?

Alba: No, don’t worry about the scars.
Robin: Don’t worry about it?
Alba: It’s not about scars. // Hmm...

Alba: Do you see something that looks like a flower?
Robin: A flower...
Niko: Robin-san!! I’ve found another flower book!!
Robin: No, I don’t see one.

Niko: Gya~~! Scars. Aaaaah!!
Text: Noo / ooo.

Niko: Ouch, Ouch !! It looks so painful!! What’s that?!! What is that?!!
Text: What kind of play is that?!!
Thought: So noisy...

p.13-14
Niko: Oh... But... // that's the same as Niko's.

Niko: I feel really happy to have / even one thing in common with Alba.

Text: —Happy.
Thought: That can’t be... true.

Alba: It’s my first time hearing something like that after showing these scars.
Thought: It’s not a happy thing at all.
Niko: Listen! // Having something in common means, // is a little special to girls!! / You get that?!!

Text: Is that so...?
Alba: You look excited... / Well... Maybe something like that is not bad. // Hm—n.
Niko: Ah!!

p.15-16
Niko: You smiled just now!! / Your face! Just now!!
Alba: ? // Eeh??

Niko: One more time!!

Alba: ...

Niko: !!
Sfx: Smile <3
Text with an arrow: Trying.

Niko: That’s it!! // A smiling face is the best!!

Text: “A smiling face is the best!!”

p.17-18
Text: Oh—, I see.

Text: People smile back to you... when you smile.

Text: Trivial things like this makes me happy, / and I feel like crying now.

p.19-20
Niko: Ah, Robin-san, I like this flower too!!
Robin: Anyway, if you just woke up, then you should least go wash your face.
Alba: Yes...

Thought: My back... Was it a dream...?
Sfx: Wipe

Sfx: Chill

Text: —No, it wasn’t a dream.

Text: Only I can see it.

p.21-22
Alba: Robin.
Robin: Yes?

Alba: Do curses... have something to do with... the forget-me-not flower?
Robin: Forget-me-not?

Robin: ...

Robin: There’s a banned curse. // You know what a “curse” is, Alba-san. / It’s a kind of Goetia that formed by your “cat” language.

Robin: The curse of the Forget-me-not. // This is a curse that can synchronize lives.

Robin: When one of them dies, the other one will die. It doesn’t matter if they love each other or not. // However, this is the “Proof of passion for deep affection." that is, to share the time of one’s death.

Robin: This heavily romanticized interpretation was once very popular among “Cats”, // and it caused the increase of the number of double suicides. It became a social problem and that’s why it’s a banned curse now, although...

p.23
Robin: What about it?

Text: -Forget me not- / ...to be continued 11/19

INeededThat · « **Reply #8 on:** September 30, 2011, 09:10:44 AM »

No need to be nervous ^^ This one isn't bad at all! I can't find many errors, although there are some things I would have corrected differently. I don't have much time right now so I can't go through all of them with you.

A few notes for the last section, though, since that's usually the hardest to proof:

It’s a kind of Goetia that is formed by your “cat” language.
- Also not sure about changing "Cats'" to "cat", but it's a valid suggestion, and since you don't have a TL to check with it's understandable.

it caused the increase of in the number of double suicides
- Plus, "an increase" may be better than "the increase" because "the increase" implies that it's something that's been established in the story already, which may not be the case.

--

One pass from me! Just sit tight and wait for two more ^^ You'll be put on a QC probation if you get three passes; till then, watch out for your capitalisations and, occasionally, your commas in your normal writing xD

reborntkh · « **Reply #9 on:** October 01, 2011, 04:45:43 AM »

OMG thank you!!!!!!!! I'm one step closer is to being a proofer. BTW what is QC probation? Is it bad?

INeededThat · « **Reply #10 on:** October 01, 2011, 08:01:20 AM »

It just means that a senior PR has to check your work before it's used (: Don't worry, it's common practice for all new applicants to go through it!

reborntkh · « **Reply #11 on:** October 02, 2011, 01:23:02 AM »

kk :)

reborntkh · « **Reply #12 on:** October 05, 2011, 11:30:02 PM »

Hello. I don't mean to be rude or anything but I was wondering if you could get the 2 proofreaders to look at my test please. Again, I don't mean to be rude or rush you guys because I know you are busy. I'm just getting a bit impatient.

reborntkh · « **Reply #13 on:** October 09, 2011, 05:27:21 AM »

Hi guys its me any I wanted to tell you that I still want to be a proofreader so can you please get to mine. Please and Thank You!!!!!!

Iceiphoenix · « **Reply #14 on:** October 14, 2011, 10:27:42 AM »

Hi there! Sorry about the wait... I think we only have 3 or 4 active proofreaders here now, and 2 of them are new. ^^"

Anyway, apart from the things that Nee pointed out, I also picked up:

Text: Don’t listen to *his/her/it’s* words. // Eyes... // —Close your eyes.
*I’m not sure about the gender off the speaker so I just put multiple options.*
- "It's" should be "its".
- In your comment, "off" should be "of".
- You also need a comma after "speaker".

Niko: Ouch, Ouch !! It looks so painful!! What’s that?!! What is that?!!
- The second "ouch" doesn't need to be capitalized.
- The space between the second "ouch" and exclamation mark needs to be removed.

Niko: Listen! // Having something in common means, // is a little special to girls!! / You get that?!!
- "Having something in common means, is a little special to girls!!" is incorrect.

~*~*~*~

As for my assessment, there's something I need to discuss with you, so please check your PMs. (If you haven't already.)

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